A BUNCH OF PEOPLE TALKING ABOUT WHAT IT MEANS TO BE HUMAN AS THIS EXPERIENCE HAS BEEN EXPLORED THROUGH MYTHOLOGY, LITERATURE, ART, THEATER, DANCE, MUSIC, PHILOSOPHY, AND RELIGION
Chelsea, I almost felt obligated to comment on yours since we both have similar titles. I obviously feel that the setting and concept is a good one. I found it interesting that you placed Siddhartha in the role of the therapist. It made for an interesting group dynamic that put Siddhartha in a teaching role. The way you represented your characters was slightly odd as it seems you picked random points along their story lines. Also some points seem to be more of a summery of the characters story as apposed to comment regarding their beliefs or insight. However you did manage to weave in some clever comments. Although I feel that you focused heavily on Siddhartha's thoughts alone. I would suggest writing more about the other characters and their reactions to the events. Also be careful to double check your facts and use internal documentation some of your comments reflected a bit of uncertainty in the characters. Finally I'm really glad I'm not hiking with that bunch, they keep complaining and I think that would ruin the hike.
Chelsea,
ReplyDeleteI almost felt obligated to comment on yours since we both have similar titles. I obviously feel that the setting and concept is a good one. I found it interesting that you placed Siddhartha in the role of the therapist. It made for an interesting group dynamic that put Siddhartha in a teaching role. The way you represented your characters was slightly odd as it seems you picked random points along their story lines. Also some points seem to be more of a summery of the characters story as apposed to comment regarding their beliefs or insight. However you did manage to weave in some clever comments. Although I feel that you focused heavily on Siddhartha's thoughts alone. I would suggest writing more about the other characters and their reactions to the events. Also be careful to double check your facts and use internal documentation some of your comments reflected a bit of uncertainty in the characters. Finally I'm really glad I'm not hiking with that bunch, they keep complaining and I think that would ruin the hike.